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Friday 20 March 2015

MOTAT

Class 12/11 went a step back in time to Motat on monday to see old machines and inventions. It was exciting going in the bus I talked to Bethan on the way. when we got there we had to pass a few old trains to get to the instructor. The instructor introduced herself to the whole class The instructors name was Katherine she was a girl and she was very nice. Then we introduced class 11/12.

Waiting patiently we went to the meeting room 2.0 because it was raining on the seats so we had to go inside instead. Katherine had to tell us all the important rules to keep safe so we wouldn't get squashed by trams/trains/cars. When we went to go to the upstairs we went to a classroom space thingymajig to learn about inventions like the plunger hat.

There were phones, typewriters, quills, chalk boards, toys and a match the old and new thing together that do the same thing. I liked the Tram Ride because we went past the zoo and there were clickity clackity everywhere. The tram ride rocked gently it was very wiggly i liked the tram ride alot.

I also liked the game zone because it was like an arcade. The game zone even had a rumbling elevator I liked that alot it made me almost vomit/throw up. I also liked the static electricity globe I liked that because it had a blue bolt going up and if you put your hand on it the bolt will bend over to where you put your hand. 

I felt more smarter and more happy going to MOTAT I will miss MOTAT so much.( exept the mirror maze :/ )
⚈ Start with a topic sentence.
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⚈ Have at least 2-3 connected sentences.
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⚈ Have sentences that are effective that
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    b.  have juicy vocab e.g action/describing  words
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    (c) grammatically correct
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  (d) punctuated correctly.
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(Think of 1 or 2 things that you need to to focus on next time, to make sure your paragraphs are effective.)
Next time I  need to make sure they are puntuated correctly and start with a topic sentence

2 comments:

  1. It sounds like you had a really interesting day at MOTAT this week Josh. I really like your interesting sentence beginnings and the extra detail that you put into your story! The more detail that you add the more I enjoy reading your stories.

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  2. You have added in some interesting details into your writing Josh and have tried using some interesting beginnings and vocab. Well done.
    Could you please post the reflection you filled out about your writing to see what you need to focus on next though. Remember we were focussing on effective paragraphs so your writing should be organised into paragraphs with one idea for each, with 2-3 connected sentences. Maybe that should be one of the things you focus on next time.

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